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Hope is a sigh against a window (Friday Fictioneers)

December 8, 2016

lucy-sol

I watched as we grew closer. A new planet. Our new home.

Excited voices chattered behind me. I couldn’t fault their noise but in that moment I wanted peace. One breath filled with silence as I stared down at the water below. And there, coming closer was land. My breath caught on a gasp. I held it and watched. In my head I heard his voice. The last words he’d ever spoken, “Get away from here. Find somewhere the war can’t touch. Somewhere safe where you can be happy.”

I fogged up the portal with my sigh. I found it.

 

This is a Friday Fictioneers prompt

word count: 100

 

 

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28 Comments
  1. I love this. Another planet!

  2. I loved the title

    • Thank you Neil. It just struck me and i loved it 😊

    • Life Lessons of a Dog Lover permalink

      I agree with Neil it is a very moving title. Great take on the prompt just a nit picking detail – in the last line should it be “I’d found it ‘”rather then “I found it.”

  3. If only such a place existed in the present for us. Great writing.

  4. Dear Laurie,

    Your title is brilliant! So much story in so few words. You really left me wanting more. Very well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. michael1148humphris permalink

    Strangely I saw a ocean living life form arriving, hope they do not eat all the fish, for I love my fish [haddock] and chips. 😄

  6. jellico84 permalink

    Love the hopeful optimism in this write! Beautiful!

  7. She did find it. i’m thinking he was left behind. Good story, Laurie.

  8. Loved the title and the story too. It unfolded very well.

  9. After all of that and this poor refuge, like so many before her, ended up in NYC. Sorry, I couldn’t resist. 😉 I really liked the story.

  10. Beautiful picture

  11. gahlearner permalink

    The title is a killer. So beautiful. As is the rest of the story, and bittersweet. What a tragedy to destroy one’s home and find a beautiful new world. How long will it last?

    • Thank you! Yes i think so, very tragic but hopeful too i hope

      • gahlearner permalink

        Yes, it’s hopeful, too. Maybe they actually learn from the past. 🙂

  12. I, too, love the title. It fills in spaces in the story – as it should.

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