And so, here we are again (Friday Fictioneers)
Tracks run in every direction as far as the eye can see. The thing is… they never actually lead anywhere. They take you back and forth in a long, long circle but ultimately, they bring you back to where you started. It’s a journey of no end. An endless parade of carriages and sweat stains, stinky unwashed people and heavy perfume. Of chatter and laughter, silence and sadness. The despairing workers surround you, unhappy families returning home or trying to get away. A train car is a microcosm of life—it’s hell, in a tiny space with no fresh air.
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Its a different one from me this week. A little taste of reality.
Trains are a particularly sore subject with me this month. My train line is experiencing “improvement” works which basically means my usual one hour trip has become 1.40hrs and means three changes… In summer! Each way.
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Wow, Laurie, that was acid! I loved the little fantasy you created of all the train tracks leading nowhere but back to the beginning, But then isn’t it the journey that becomes important, not the destination?
Yes!! Exactly Neil. Thank you for such kind words. What a great compliment. It just flowed.
Dear Laurie,
You painted a vivid picture with your words. Don’t we all feel that way at times, too. I could see this being the intro to a longer story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, hopefully a story with a happy ending!
This is great. The perfect description of the treadmill we’re all in.
Thank You!
We don’t have to complete the circle. We can always get off somewhere and stay off. But few of us do. Nicely done.
This is true, Sandra. I think they might be the luck ones
Very descriptive imagery here. Loved the endlessness that was conveyed. Do we have the option of deboarding, don’t we?
Depends on if you have to get to work Neel 😳
Great writing – I can sense your frustration at your train journey!
Thanks Iain… it also says a lot about the douchebags who take the train. When they race for the bus they don’t care who is in their way… some people really show how selfish they are in these situations
Heck I hope your train provider and his customers do not take over my local service, 😉
Lol…. seriously, thy are pretty bad for service
Sorry about your train problems. I can imagine it is quite a pain.
Thanks John… i shouldn’t whinge too much 😊
40 minutes extra is screaming time.
Especially in the way home!!! 😆😆
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I think this is one of your best FF submissions. Absolutely loved it.
Thank you Alicia. That means so much to me!! 😆
Hmmm. He is fed up with the circle of life. Good one!
Absolutely!
Talk about being stuck in a rut… We all do at certain moments of our lives, don’t we?
I think so, and we don’t realise until we stop one day and think, what am I doing?
That’s what I did, so to speak!
I like the idea here of the microcosm of life in the train and that despite the fact we think or even dream the trains are taking us somewhere, ultimately we end up back where we started. Depressing thought.
Yes it is isn’t it… still perhaps it means that running away will not solve any problems?
Makes me think of someone who’s stuck, dissatisfied.
Sorry about your interrupted train trips.
Ha yes well i might be a tad grumpy 😊
Perfect description of some commuter trains… the endless cycle of salarywork.
Certainly feels that way!
Fortunately my days of commuting by train are long behind me, but I remember the experience well. You captured the smells and unpleasantness perfectly!
Thanks Clare!!