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Keep looking (Friday Fictioneers)

June 15, 2017

“Whatcha doin?”

“Watching the sky.” I scrub beneath my nose and sniff harder.


“They’s coming John.”

“Jeez, you serious?”

I cough up a lung and rub my chest. These damned flu tablets weren’t doing shit. “I tell you. They’re coming. Lookit the sky.”

John looked up. I followed his gaze. The clouds were swirling, grey and turning darker. “See.”

“I don’t see nothing, Billy. Sleep it off inside. Damned cold out here.”

I huddle further into my parka, cuddling my bat. “Ima fine.” I needed to watch. I needed to see. When they came, I wouldn’t be caught offguard.



This is a Friday Fictioneers prompt post

word count: 100

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  1. Those are some pain meds he’s on. Great story!

  2. I liked it that you didn’t overdo it, and tell us whether they were really coming or he was imagining it

  3. Nice job, Laurie

  4. Nice take on the prompt. I remember having this feeling as a kid,when I was ill .

  5. Dear Laurie,

    Flu tabs or fever…sounds like a little of both. Or maybe they really are coming. 😉 Nicely done.



  6. Great story. So many different possibilities.

  7. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover permalink

    Great dialogue. I like that you left it unclear if something was really coming. I enjoy the opportunity to let me imagination run wild.

  8. Great descriptions of cold and determination. 🙂

  9. michael1148humphris permalink

    I to enjoyed the dialogue and the varying possibilities

  10. You never really know do you… a bat in the hand is better than bats in the belfry, but both at the same time is a bit disturbing

  11. Dale permalink

    I, too, loved the dialogue and the fact that we just don’t know for sure what’s going on. Great job, Laurie!

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