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Innocence lost (Friday Fictioneers)

February 2, 2018

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

 

At four years old he saw things. Things I would never see. Sad eyes looked up to mine. “They destroyed it,” his voice quivered as his gaze swung back. Too young to see this, I pulled him away. “No mom, I have to see. I have to remember.”

We walked further observing the perfect circles next to each trunk. He started laughing. “It’s okay, mom. They got away.”

“Who did?”

He smiled in reply.

“That’s good then.”

He nodded. The look in his eyes scared me. “They’ll pay.”

 

A fire destroyed the woodcutter’s home two nights later. All within perished.

 

 

This is a Friday Fictioneers prompt

Word count:100

 

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33 Comments
  1. That;s an extreme revenge. And hard for a four year old to carry out

  2. More disturbing thoughts. Thanks, Laurie.

  3. Dear Laurie,

    I’m not sure if I should be disturbed by what the four-year-old saw or what he did. A lot of story layered between the lines. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. Wow – I really enjoyed reading this story and wondered where it was leading me. I didn’t expect that closing line! Well done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  5. Dale permalink

    That is extremely disturbing. Well done!

  6. Great story. I imagine little tree sprites taking their revenge, and the boy befriending them for some mischievous deeds in the future.

  7. Harsh. Whatever lived in the tree escaped the destruction of their home, but the woodcutter and his family didn’t. 😦 I don’t know whether it speaks more about the story or more about me that I wouldn’t feel so bad about the outcome if I knew the woodcutter was cutting down trees for commercialism rather than as a source of heat to survive. Regardless of whether I’m a horrible person or not, I enjoyed this take on Rochelle’s prompt!

  8. Woah, that’s sinister. Iam assuming he could just see wood nymphs or tree gods doing their things and wasn’t actually responsible for the fire.

  9. His eyes scared me too! Nice one Laurie.

    Click to read my FriFic!

  10. Cleverly written, Laurie.
    You took me on a journey from thinking that the things the child could see were imaginary, through to the violent deaths of the woodcutter and his family at the hands of tree spirits.
    Excellent writing!

  11. I think this is one of your best. Great idea, and spooky but in an almost charming way. Apart from the fire, that is…

  12. The child clearly has connections to the trees. Love the idea!

  13. I want to know what was living in the tree! But for sleeping at night maybe better not. Good one. This could be a good horror fantasy novel.

    • Thank you! Yes it sorta had that feel… its the creepy kids who know more than we do. Always gets me.

  14. I wander so much what it was that lived in that tree… but I think that the revenge might be a lesson…

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