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Endless Blue (Friday Fictioneers)

February 14, 2019

PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll

 

Madness.

Real or imagined?

 

It’s a small room. No bigger than my childhood playroom. Four walls, tiny window, bars.

I can see the sky, so it’s not that bad. Clouds drift past.

Wispy.

Unfocused.

Like my mind.

 

Today is a good day.

Today I remember.

 

My hands are clean, my nails grown long. But once… once they were red.

Red with blood.

It’s a bright color at first. Shiny, warm and wet.

Then it grows dark, and cold. Tacky. It washes away leaving nothing behind.

I peer up through the window. Puffy white clouds in endless blue.

A good day.

 

 

This is a Friday Fictioneer’s Prompt

Word count: 100

 

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37 Comments
  1. A great character piece, Laurie

  2. Abhijit Ray permalink

    Is he in a jail cell from where he can see the sky?

  3. An excellent piece, I like how you bring out the feeling of regret and the longing for freedom.

  4. Loved the fractured style of this.

  5. gahlearner permalink

    That gives me goose bumps. That mind is really wispy–and dangerous. Great writing.

  6. A troubled soul indeed. Good days lead to bad then back then back again.

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  7. Liked how you portrayed your character through a stream of consciousness. You captured something very chilling with the voice. Well done.

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  8. Seems the character is under treatment for mental instability. Great portrayal.

  9. Love the “jaggedness” of this write, Laurie. Shows her mental instability!

  10. Dear Laurie,

    Well depicted insanity. It almost has a Poe feel to it. “…some say that I’m mad…” The reader can almost see the story that leads up to this moment. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  11. This is well-portrayed. The character voice is great.

  12. Very well done. I loved that you used the word “tacky;” it really gave me a sense of this character who finds the dried blood color to be tacky.

  13. She’s having a good day – your description and mood create a sense of peace, but the undercurrent builds a powerful contrast.

  14. Very creative. Peaceful clouds and blue sky depict a good day where the madness is kept at bay. But, something dark lurks below the surface and must be managed. Excellent piece!

  15. The fractured mind shows through in the short, choppy sentences and repetition. Good write.

  16. Oh.. it seems that maybe a good day is one when she doesn’t remember what she’s done.

  17. Oh, my. You’re very good at giving us a frightening glimpse into a deeply troubled mind. Well done.

  18. You take us right into this man’s mind here and it’s quite disturbing. Well done

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