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Truth Hurts (Friday Fictioneers)

April 4, 2019

PHOTO PROMPT © Ronda Del Boccio

You could hear the crackle as flames consumed log after log, stick after stick.

We’ve been out here a while.

Since the landing.

Since they came.

The kids still think it’s a game. Camping with the whole town. “Everyone’s here, mom.”

Not everyone.

We hadn’t told them yet. Well, how could you? Everything has changed. No city, no government, no law. Everyone in town was just … gone. How do you tell them that? When they know it’s where Dad works.

Shit. I’m getting teary again. No use crying.

“Let’s go get more wood, mom.”

How do I tell them.

This is a Friday Fictioneers Prompt

Word count: 100

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25 Comments
  1. Frightened people do strange things. Not telling your kids they’re in danger is as strange as they come

  2. Mom’s pain and anguish comes strongly across in the story. Great writing.

  3. A difficult situation at the best of times, but they’re going to guess sooner or later!

  4. Dear Laurie,

    What a burden for the mother to bear. She will have to find a way or someone else is bound to tell them. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. A horrifying situation. They are all in shock. But children often understand more than they are given credit for. This could be the beginning of a much longer story.

  6. Agree with gahlearner. This opening deserves a longer story. Intense, emotional. Good writing.

  7. You’ve painted such a vivid picture in so few words. Good work!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  8. I always wonder why adult think keeping children in the dark is protecting them. It so isn’t!

  9. Abhijit Ray permalink

    Family has move to a different place / planet? Why?

  10. Intense scene!

  11. Very well done. They will have to harden up to reality soon enough, so I think allowing them a little innocence is a good idea.

  12. A gripping story. I can understand the mother’s dilemma – you portray it convincingly. I’m also intrigued by the beginning – ‘the landing’, fires, town disappeared. Definitely a bigger story here.

  13. I could feel the mom’s tension. Dealing with the loss of her husband and their new reality. She’ll know when it’s time. Excellent!

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