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Don’t fall asleep (Friday Fictioneers)

April 11, 2019

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Silence.

My blood pounds. My heart thumps inside my chest. My breath is tiny gasps… too fast.

That’s the fear talking.

I clutch the wooden stake tighter, feeling splinters dig into my skin. In my other hand, I take refuge in my cross. I feel its shape press into my fingers like a brand.

All week the creature has not stirred. It took three babes last month. We swore it would take no more and have alternated the watch since.

Tonight, I watch.

Cold air chills the nape of my neck. I shiver.

A roar shakes the cobblestones.

It comes.

This is a Friday Fictioneers prompt

Word Count: 100

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22 Comments
  1. I liked the splinters in the wooden stake

  2. What a cliffhanger to leave us with. Tense stuff 🙂

  3. EeeeK! Well, since the narrator is telling the story, I’m assuming he survived 🙂

  4. Fearfully read. What is it about old Churches and barbaric vampire like creatures. Where there is heaven there is also hell. Well told.

  5. That story gave me an instant chill up my spine!

  6. gahlearner permalink

    Oh, the build-up of tension and fear was very efficient, especially with the small details like the splinters and the shape of the cross. I hope the vampire gets destroyed.

  7. It takes the babies! Horrible creature. Loved the splinter and cross details, too.
    Well done.

    • Yes very evil monsters in the dark. But the nun has faith and a will of iron. No one will pass her.

  8. Dear Laurie,

    Sounds like a horrid creature. The fear is tangible and so are the splinters…ouch. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  9. Killing it would be less scary than that kind of wait.

  10. Oh no. I hope she can use that stake and cross to good effect. I like the contrast between the silence at the start, and the roar at the end. Very good.

  11. Your protag is well prepared. let this be the last of the killings. So nicely told!

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