Better run (Friday Fictioneers)
It’s been days.
Several of them… I’m sure… It’s hard to tell. I count the sunrises but fall asleep often so I might have missed one—or more.
Not natural sleep of course. The shot they give me with each meal contains something to keep me malleable. So maybe weeks.
I don’t know.
I find it hard to care.
My partner lied. He set me up. I should have expected it. We’re both crooks, thieves, liars.
Maybe he’s smart one. He knows I’ll come for him when I get out.
I twist my wrist beneath the rope.
He’d better run.
This is a Friday Fictioneers Prompt
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Word Count: 100
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This would make a great opening for a thriller. If you wanted to experiment with this, you could mess up the sentence structure a little to show the narrator’s wooziness
Thanks Neil, great ideas
This is brilliant and crying out for a bit more! Catch him if you can…
Here’s my story.
Thanks so much, Keith. 😊
Love to hear the backstory that led to her imprisonment. Somehow I think she’ll escape.
I think so too… 😊 thanks for reading
Oh, excellent scenario for a continuation! Also, thank you so much for the lovely review of my novel, so pleased that you liked it. I swear I will read one of your novels eventually, I just need to find the time!
Thank you!
And you are very welcome, I really enjoyed reading it. Looking forward to book 2
Released a week today – starting to get nervous!
It’ll be great! ❤ good luck and congratulations.
Nicely done! It’s got a perfect suspense element to it!
Thank you !
Ah, the thoughts of revenge are a powerful incentive to stay alive and get out. Well told.
Indeed… and boy is she pissed off (angry)
Dear Laurie,
You’ve presented the reader with a real nail-biter. This feels like the first chapter of an interesting novel. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle. A few people have said that… you are all so lovely. I might have to do a bit more.
😉
Your theme is all set. You could develop your characters and make this a longer story or even a book. You’d have to figure the details of the betrayal, too. Interesting.
Oh yes… I do have some ideas. Thanks so much for reading.
Good luck to her and bad luck to him.
Oh yes. She is coming for him…
I have to agree with everyone. This definitely has the makings of a thriller!
Thanks so much, Dale! I do have a few ideas.
Honor among thieves… this is not an end but a beginning… makes me think of Kill Bill.
Thanks ! Thats a great compliment 😊
That little story leaves all sorts of questions hanging, especially ‘Why are they keeping her alive?’ I hope you’re going to write a longer version…!
Thank you so much, Penny. Sorry to leave you hanging for now 😉
I hope she gets free soon. He better run fast and far. She sounds like she means it. Well done, Laurie. —- Suzanne
Oh yeah, she’s coming for him… 😊 thanks for reading