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One who sees all (Friday Fictioneers)

October 3, 2019
PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson

The panicked note she’d left the night she died had faded now. From the sun, time, rain, and numerous children running over it… It was her last link to the world, her last link to reality.

She held up a hand seeing the ground through it. She was fading too.

The sound of running shoes pounded the path that ran alongside the court. She looked up, saw the fear on the other woman’s face, saw her glance back at the monster that chased her.

Another would fall tonight. She moaned at her amorphous shape knowing she could only bare witness.

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  1. Great idea to make the writing a goodbye note

  2. If only she could find a way to warn them what lurks in the park. Good stuff.

  3. bearmkwa permalink

    Good one, nice eerie quality to it.

  4. Looking on but unable to do anything. Is that what we have in store?

    Here’s my story.

  5. Wow. Good one, Laurie.

  6. Dear Laurie,

    A little on the eerie side. So I wondered if this was an amorphous form, has she taken another shape? I always loved the shape shifters on Star Trek. 😉 Love the description of her holding up her hand and watching it fade.



    • Oh I love the shape shifters in Star Trek too. I’m glad the creepy vibe came across. Thanks for reading, Rochelle

  7. Maybe she will gain powers (like Patrick Swayze did in Ghost) and will be able to will things to move, or write something once she has faded completely and help save others… who knows?
    Well done, you!

  8. Excellent storytelling, Laurie. Could be a piece to a larger story.

  9. You’ve spun a tale of horror and sadness here. Very well done.

  10. A good story both frightening and sad, Laurie. This point of view of a ghost is unusable but effective, — Suzanne

  11. Sorry about that. I meant “unusual”, not “unusable”. There’s a big difference there. 🙂 — Suzanne

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