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A little dab will cover the worst of it (Friday Fictioneers)

July 23, 2020
PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Paint was splattered around the garage. Gazing up at her spaceship she could see the scorch marks beneath the paint. She’d gone for a pattern to hide the worst of the wounds. The repairs had gone well by the look of it, the tears soldered, and parts replaced where they had replacements. It looked like a new weapon mount had been added. A pleasant surprise. The mechanic approached scrubbing oil from ever-stained fingers. “Well?”

“Looks good. How much?”

“On the house. You saved the sheds.”

“Cheers.” Ambling toward the ramp she figured it was time to drop off the merchandise.

word count: 100

Here is another that just needed to be written…

It’s the smell that stays with me when I remember the painting room. Turpentine and paint fumes war with the aftershave. So many images created by arthritic tanned fingers. There are hundreds of boards stacked up against the wall. I can’t look at any of them. The pain is still raw. Tears drip down papery skin. There is a tremble in aged limbs as I sit down. Loss is hard. You are still here, everywhere I turn. Clearing your throat, a cough, wheezing heavy breaths, a sneeze or two. I must close the door. I’m not ready for this yet.

This is a Friday Fictioneers Prompt

You can read more of the FF responses here

Did you see my earlier post? You can pre-order The Tiger’s Eye now (Wyvern’s Peak Publishing). It’s book two of the Stones of Power series that started with The Butterfly Stone. Links below.

Amazon US: https://amzn.to/32HiQnF

Amazon AUS: https://amzn.to/39gSYAl

Amazon UK: https://amzn.to/3fR9xoL

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23 Comments
  1. The scents in the this are lovely

  2. Two very different takes, both good in their own way, but I really liked the emotion in the 2nd one. Good luck with the book launch!

  3. Dear Laurie,

    Well written takes. I really like the second one.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. I like how you painted an emotional picture in your second story, an image of sad sorry.

  5. A good pair. Enjoyed them.

  6. Hi Laurie, I think I’m with the concensus, the first is great, especially because she saved the sheds and I have a liking for sheds but the second one is a level above, great description and feeling, love it.

  7. I liked this line… Turpentine and paint fumes war with the aftershave. I figured she was an intergalactic drug or weapons dealer. Funny thing, when I read tears soldered I read it as crying tears, not a rip. Gave it a very eerie vibe. I reread and see that’s not the case, nice start to a sci-fi story.

    #2 had heart. Nicely done.

    • Oooooo that’s very cool. I didn’t see that but tears is certainly evocative !
      Thanks so much Ted

  8. Interesting pairing. I also favor the descriptions in the second one.

  9. The first one was good… the second one was beautiful and bittersweet.

  10. Nice to get a gratis ship repair for doing good works. The 2nd story captured raw grief. Both well-told. Congrats on the new book. I plan on getting the first book in the series when time/space permits.

    • Thank you! Yes the second story is about my Poppa who we lost this year.

      And thank you!

      • My condolences to you, Laurie. Sounds like you and he were close. You are welcome.

  11. Both excellent, but the second one spoke to my emotions. Beautiful.

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