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A sweet treat (Friday Fictioneers)

April 1, 2021
PHOTO PROMPT © Jennifer Pendergast  

The smell was captivating.

All through town the scent of dough and sugar wafted to nostrils tempting stomachs and turning heads.

Mothers everywhere slammed windows shut. Bolted doors and cooked cabbage to overwhelm the tantalizing odor.

Little Jimmy and Deb were not so lucky. Their window frame had a crack from last week’s storm. Though they had been tucked tightly into bed the smell seduced them into prying open the window. Two little bodies shimmied down the drainpipe and hustled toward the cottage.

The door slam was heard across town.

A mother’s wailing cry.

A wicked cackle.

Two more lost.

This is a Friday Fictioneers Prompt

You can read more FF prompt responses here

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31 Comments
  1. The Pied Baker of Hamlin. Lovely

  2. Oh, very good. Loved the idea of boiling cabbage to protect against the smell! 🙂

  3. Can’t leave those cracks untended!

  4. I so feared there would be an unsafe house!
    Loved this!

  5. If only witches weren’t such good bakers?! Well played.

  6. GHLearner permalink

    Wow, what a great take. If only Jimmy and Deb had learned something fro Hänsel and Gretel….

    • Oh yes! Reading more widely might have helped them escape. Or not. Perhaps the witch won’t allow such stories in this little town? Thanks for reading.

  7. Ohhhh, that was GOOOOD! What a scary version of “Hansel and Gretel”….I think that’s the right story. Anyway, loved this precautionary tale. It was awesome!

  8. A lovely combination of the Pied Piper and Hansel and Gretel.

  9. A delicious story!

  10. Captivating story from the beginning. So well done!

  11. I’m shocked by how many sinister stories came out of the photo. Well done!

  12. Dear Laurie,

    Sounds like a cross between the Pied Piper and Hansel and Gretel. Who knew that something so sweet-smelling could be so evil? Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  13. Ooh, how delightfully wicked! I love how you take the wonderful smell and make it a menace. “Not so lucky” not to smell the treats, and the mothers burning cabbage too. I keep telling my son to use non-visual senses in his stories; I might show him this!

  14. Somebody found the perfect, irresistible bait. Creepy.

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