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All it takes is a moment (Friday Fictioneers)

September 2, 2021

Floating so peacefully down this river I am worlds away from interstellar war. I can almost image it was a bad dream. Here the sun’s heat warms my face, and pollen sneaks up my nose making me sneeze. I hear buzzing bees, bird calls and the splash of waves. There is no laser fire, explosions or the smell of blood. I close my eyes and concentrate on my breath, on my heartbeat, and on the tremor in my hands.

I can’t go back.

Decision made I drop my communicator into the water. The squad departs at dawn. I must hide.

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  1. This could have been a shell-shocked soldier in the trenches, or even a bullied bank clerk. You captured the trauma and the need to escape so well, Laurie

  2. You masterfully described the sharp contrast between a peaceful spot in nature that doesn’t care about wars. Let’s hope, the MC can escape the horror.

  3. Good idea, hide by the tranquil river. Well done, Laurie.

  4. Great Take and descriptors

  5. We all have a choice, but sooner or later that freedom is taken from us. Do they shoot deserters?

  6. Laurie, I love being a witness to the MC’s watershed moment. Good for her. Sounds like she can take care of herself.

  7. I hope he can find a place to hide though I’m not sure staying there will fix what ails him.

  8. I hope the planet can provide the sort of hiding place “you” are seeking. Perhaps all is not as it seems. . . . Or not.

  9. Dear Laurie,

    I hope your MC can make a clean escape. You had me in the water, swimming along. Nicely done.



  10. Ain Starlingsson permalink

    Works very well, leading to the decision, v good…

  11. A very satisfying story, Laurie. Your ending is a surprise and yet makes perfect sense. I’m rooting for your deserter!

  12. Oh yes. Good for her. She needed to break free from all that.

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