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What do you see (Friday Fictioneers)

June 23, 2022
PHOTO PROMPT © John Nixon

He peers in the window again and she wonders what has caught his eye. He never comes in, only spends minutes lingering outside and yet she can tell it’s something important. Each day after he passes, she runs to the window to examine the display. She changes it daily. What can it be?

One afternoon, running back from her late lunch she runs into him on the footpath. She steps aside but can’t stop from reaching out a hand. “Please, what do you see?”

His pale, watery eyes smile as his lips tremble. “My wife. She’s standing right beside me.”

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22 Comments
  1. Beautifully written, Laurie, and so clever to do it through the eyes of the shopkeeper

  2. Ooh, good one 😊. I’m binge watching Ghost Whisperer on Disney+ right now and this reminds me of it.

    • Thank you!! I always check mirrors, you never know who might be watching. I’m watching Ghosts a British comedy at the moment. It’s hilarious. I think the US are doing version of it soon too.

      • I’ve seen the US version (it’s on ParamountPlus) and I love it! It’s currently my new favourite show for this year. I haven’t watched the UK version, but I’m sure it’s just as funny.

      • Seriously ? 👀 I sooooo have to watch it!

  3. Bittersweet Laurie, a touching tale of life and death in 100 words.

  4. Ah, the wonders of a reflective mind, memories revisited and painfully as he knows she has gone. Nicely told.

  5. I shall not cry. I will not cry. — Touching bit, Laurie. Well done.

  6. That was very touching

  7. Dear Laurie,

    That mannequin certainly has represented a wife or two this week. Sweet story, nicely told.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  8. Laurie, I think she has returned to take him back with her. Gentle storytelling that I enjoyed reading.

  9. Oh, that’s sad, but also touching. Great idea to tell it through the other character’s point of view rather than directly as the old man might have told it. We identify with her as well as him.

  10. This story unfolded nicely as I read it, Laurie.
    I agree the dress has brought out a few wife tales.
    He does have a focused look on his face. You saw that and ran with it.
    Great …. 😎

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